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Hello, my name is Kenza DRISSI, and today, I’m going to talk about the notion of “Ideas of progress”.

Basically, the idea of progress consist in believing that the world can become better in terms of science, new technologies, art, liberty and quality of life.

Progress implies change, some evolution from an old order with old traditions to a new order which is not necessarily embraced by all . It's at the heart oh a heated debate between those who approve of these changes and those who resist and criticize them in the name of tradition . As the rythm of progress seems to have accelerated these last few decades with an ever faster increase of major technological and scientific breakthroughs, the cult of novelty and progress is now being questioned . Indeed, a growing number of people voice their concern about the ethical, social and environmental consequences of such development and about the excesses of today's consumer society ."

Is India on the move ? This is a good question which we studied X (omission /préposition) many documents in the beginning of the year. First of all, we are going to present India today, then we’ll see what changed ( present perfect) between before and now, at last we’ll determine what India is going to become in the future.

, at(in) the same time, 42 % of Indians lived below 80 pounds a day in 2005, as we can see, inequality is extremely strong( un autre adj.?) The Indians are mainly Hinduism( nom) (80%). Moreover, 600 000 girls go missing every years( oh!) and : assertion suivante un peu dangereuse à amener ici : sauf si c'est écrit noir/blanc dans vos livres scolaires

Yet, we can have noticed many shifts for several years. Agriculture and Industry are sectors of activity that are declining in favour( anglais) of the services, population is fast-growing and the percentage of people living below 80 pounds X ( aux.present perfect) decreased from 60% in 1981 to 42% in 2005 and cast system( the system of...) is over. Nowadays, everyone ( are you convinced?)can go from poverty to wealth, which is a huge shift. India X (aux.present perfect : vous faites un constat aujourd'hui)jumped( to leap is better) full-force onto the microfinance bandwagon and the industry has been growing at 70% annually over the past five years. , people want ( tend to..) to stay.

. Gendercide pratices will disappear ( trop d'assertions encore) and all together, the Indians will work to build a better country as they respect equality of anybodywherever they come from. Therefore, they will be glad of their country and what it X( aux.present perfect). became.

To conclude, India is on the move, it’s beginning better, inequality is falling while gendercide pratices won’t exist anymore, India is turning into a modern country but a( art.défini) big trouble which is going to accentuate itself( mal dit), it is its population. The numbers of citizens will be so big that it’s maybe it might brake India evolution.

Is India on the move ? This is a good question which we studied many documents in the beginning of the year. First of all, we are going to present India today, then we’ll see what changed between before and now, at last we’ll determine what India is going to become in the future.

In 2011, India’s population represented 17.5% of the world’s population

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